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Bonsoir, pouvez me dire si j'ai des fautes dans le texte et que si j'ai bien respecter la consigne.
Consigne : Il faut écrire une histoire qui fait peur. Avec des connecteurs logiques temporels, le bon vocabulaire de la peur, les bons temps du passé utilisés (prétérit simple, prétérit en -ing, past perfect simple etc).

Le Texte :

This is the story of 4 friends : Johnny, Mike, Lucie and Mohammed. They lived in
Washington, they were 16 years old. One day Mike found the idea of ​​going to the
countryside which is near a forest while the holidays. When they arrived, they had the
idea of ​​going into the forest. The next day they were going to the forest, they had gone during the nigh. When they were walking, they had seen a old house that were a bit broken. Mohammed was telling his group to come into the house to see what was inside. But the group was not in favor of this idea however with the insistence of
Mohammed the group had entered this house. When they were in the house, there was a very heavy atmosphere and suddenly the front doors were closed. The panicked group was running for the front door but it was closed but suddenly they saw a shadow behind them.Therefore Johnny flashed where they had seen the shadow but there was nobody. And unexpectedly a hairy monster that looked like a werewolf came out of the ceiling, grabbing Mike by the arm towards the second floor. And seconds later the group heard Mike screaming in pain, so the scared group ran to the second floor to pick up Mike. Arrived in the second floor, he missed Mohammed in the group and suddenly the lights came on and went out. Terrified Lucie and Johnny ran downstairs to the exit door but she was closed, so Lucie had taken a hammer that was on a table and she had broken a window. Lucie passed first but Johnny trying to pass, he got caught by the monster. Lucie, trembling with fear, ran back home but she had stumbled, and the creature had grabbed her to take her home. And since that day, there is no more news from this group.

Sagot :

camobrien315

Réponse :

Salut! La consigre est respectée. Voici ton texte corrigé :) j'ai marqué les corrections en gras.

Explications :

This is the story of 4 friends : Johnny, Mike, Lucie and Mohammed. They lived in

Washington, they were 16 years old. One day Mike had the idea of ​​going to the  countryside which is near a forest while the holidays. When they arrived, they had the idea of going into the forest. The next day they went to the forest, they had gone during the night. When they were walking, they saw an old house that was a bit broken. Mohammed was telling his group to come into the house to see what was inside. But the group was not in favor of this idea however with the insistence of

Mohammed the group entered the house. When they were in, there was a very heavy atmosphere and suddenly the front doors closed. The panicked group was running to the front door but it was closed. Suddenly they saw a shadow behind them.Therefore Johnny flashed where they had seen the shadow but there was nobody. Unexpectedly, a hairy monster that looked like a werewolf came out of the ceiling, grabbing Mike by the arm towards the second floor. And seconds later the group heard Mike screaming in pain, so the scared group ran to the second floor to pick up Mike. Arrived on the second floor,  Mohammed was missing. Then, the lights came on and off. Terrified, Lucie and Johnny ran downstairs to the exit door but it was still closed. Lucie had taken a hammer that was on a table and she had broken a window. Lucie passed first but Johnny trying to pass got caught by the monster. Lucie, trembling with fear, ran back home but she had stumbled, and the creature grabbed her to take her home. And since that day, nobody has seen them again.

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