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Bonjour, j'aurais besoin d'aide pour un devoir d'anglais. Merci à ceux qui m'aideront.

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Texte:
Today, science evolves and creates new robots. Robots can be as helpful as dangerous. Then how is it at work? We'll first see the helpful aspects of robots and besides the dangerous aspects.
On the one hand, robots can be very helpful at work. It cans help for a lot of jobs and works, like printing or stocking data. People can trust what a robot do because they always give us right informations. Robots have already helped a lot of industries and compagnies to grow up, that conveys its trustworthiness.
On the other hand, robots can be dangerous too.
Hackers can infiltrate networks to steal informations and use it for their own plans. Besides, some malfunctions can appear. In that case, robots make mistakes and the more they have an important place, the more the consequences will be serious.
So we saw that robots are really helpful at work but people shouldn't give them responsabilities because of their vulnerability. They are very dangerous too, and some industries already fell because of that. If humanity relies on robots, humans will be quickly sidelined. Companies are based on improvement and research on artificial intelligence: One day, robots may even take the place of men in the world, who knows...


Sagot :

Impeccable mais je vois que tu répète plusieurs fois le mot "dangerous" je pense que tu devrais le remplacer par un synonyme sinon it's good ;)

Bonjour,
Today, engineers design and create new robots. (On parle de création donc c’est mieux de mettre “engineers”,

Robots can be useful but also dangerous (n’utilise pas “as” car ce n’est pas une comparaison ),

And then the dangerous aspect of robots (beside ne fonctionne pas bien avec cette phrase),

It can help (sans le s sur can),
Au lieu de dire jobs and works dit tasks at work,
What robots do puisque que tu met “ they” après c’est au pluriel,
Gives us the right informations,

That shows it’s trustworthiness,

And they have an important place so the consequences can be devastating .

J’espère t’avoir aidé sens toi libre de poser des questions
Passe une bonne journée.